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Your next-door neighboor owns a small dog that barks throught the day and the night. Write a letter to your neighboor requesting that something be done about the dog. Include in your letter: your reason for writing what you would like to happen a nice, respectful style

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Dear Sir or Madam I would to take a moment to let you know that
I
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your
dog
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 break my nervous
everyday
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every day
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. Your small
dog
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 barks throughout the day and the night
then
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 it destroyed my family and other
neighboors
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neighboors'
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 quiet life. I can not concentrate on my own studies and my family can not relax.
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Moreover
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 my dad works online and your
dog
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's barks break his attention for his work.
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, his projects increase day by day.
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Also
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 we cannot
sleeo
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sleep
 whole the night because of your
dog
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. I would like to say that I saw the
advertisiment
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advertisement
 yesterday. I read that our town had
place
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a place
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 where look after dogs and cats.
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 you can bring your
dog
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 there. If you
want
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 see your
dog
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 or spend time with your
dog
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 anytime you can go there and
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 they give
your
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you your
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dog
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. I think you do not get me wrong. I hope you solve
this
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 problem as soon as possible. I look forward to your response. Yours faithfully Feruzabonu
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Task Achievement
Ensure you clearly introduce the reason for writing at the beginning to make your intention clear.
Coherence & Cohesion
Include more structured paragraphs, each focusing on a single aspect of the issue for better coherence.
Coherence & Cohesion
Using a variety of sentence structures and linking words can improve the flow of your letter.
Task Achievement
Polish your letter with a more respectful tone by suggesting solutions politely and expressing understanding towards your neighbour's situation.
General Advice
Review grammar and sentence construction for clear communication.
General Advice
Remember to address your neighbor politely, using 'Dear [Neighbor's Name]' if known, for a more personal touch.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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