You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn't able to play with you at the weekend. You decide to write to him in hospital, telling him about the match. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, • tell him which team won • describe the conditions on the day • say how you felt about

Dear Azizbek I am writing to you
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purpose, I will give you some information about our football team. You had an accident. Are you
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now ? Our team members missed you. We won in
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competition. Alas, we celebrated it without you. Is the hospital service good ? We will visit you with our team
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after a few days. We won in a high calculate. We
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happy
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this
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I am going to describe
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our conditions on the days. We are
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without you.
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, we are hard trying for next competition. I hope
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I will play football with you. In my opinion, our
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a benefit.
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amazed. Our coach gave us many tips and they helped us win. If you get well
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, we will start training together. Yours faithfully, Jasur uktamov
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Tone & Empathy
Begin the letter with a more empathetic greeting, acknowledging your friend's situation before diving into the details about the match. This creates a more thoughtful tone.
Grammar
Ensure clarity in your writing by maintaining consistent tense and subject-verb agreement. For example, 'We are boring without you' should be 'We are bored without you' to accurately reflect your feelings.
Structure
Organize the letter into clear paragraphs, each focusing on one of the prompts given. One for the team's win, another describing the conditions of the day, and finally, your feelings about the situation.
Cohesion
To enhance cohesion, use transitional phrases between sentences and paragraphs. This will make your letter flow more smoothly and logically.
Closing
End the letter with a warm closing sentiment, expressing hope or well wishes for your friend's recovery. This not only follows conventions but also reinforces the caring tone of your letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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