You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn't able to play with you at the weekend. You decide to write to him in hospital, telling him about the match. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, • tell him which team won • describe the conditions on the day • say how you felt about
Dear Azizbek
I am writing to you
this
purpose, I will give you some information about our football team. You had an accident. Are you Change preposition
for this
health
now ? Our team members missed you.
We won in Replace the word
healthy
this
competition. Alas, we celebrated it without you. Is the hospital service good ? We will visit you with our team in
after a few days. We won in a high calculate. We Change preposition
apply
have
happy Verb problem
are
from
Change preposition
with
this
game. Do you happy from
itChange preposition
about
.
I am going to describe Change the punctuation
?
you
Change preposition
to you
about
Change preposition
apply
the
our conditions on the days. We are Remove the article
apply
boring
without you. Replace the word
bored
Although
, we are hard trying for next competition. I hope,
I will play football with you.
In my opinion, our Remove the comma
apply
last
football was difficult. However
, we hard try to it. This
is gave
a benefit. Change the verb form
gives
Although
, we won in this
game. I was felt some
amazed. Our coach gave us many tips and they helped us win. If you get well Correct quantifier usage
apply
son
, we will start training together.
Yours faithfully,
Jasur uktamovCorrect your spelling
soon
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Tone & Empathy
Begin the letter with a more empathetic greeting, acknowledging your friend's situation before diving into the details about the match. This creates a more thoughtful tone.
Grammar
Ensure clarity in your writing by maintaining consistent tense and subject-verb agreement. For example, 'We are boring without you' should be 'We are bored without you' to accurately reflect your feelings.
Structure
Organize the letter into clear paragraphs, each focusing on one of the prompts given. One for the team's win, another describing the conditions of the day, and finally, your feelings about the situation.
Cohesion
To enhance cohesion, use transitional phrases between sentences and paragraphs. This will make your letter flow more smoothly and logically.
Closing
End the letter with a warm closing sentiment, expressing hope or well wishes for your friend's recovery. This not only follows conventions but also reinforces the caring tone of your letter.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite