The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart
compare
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the difference
of
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in
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the cutting tools between 1.4
millions
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million
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and 0.8
miliion
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million
year
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years
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ago.
Overall
, the size of
cutting
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the cutting
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remained
unchange
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unchanged
while
the size of the cutter became larger.
On the other hand
, the cutter became thinner significantly. In detail,
both
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front
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view and the back view, the
tool
in
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0.8
million
year
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years
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ago was huger than that in 1.4
million
years ago. In
term
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terms
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of cutting size, both of the
tools
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tool's
tools'
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instrument
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instruments
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could chop the thing in 5cm. When we look at the side view of the tools, we can observe that
tool
B is much thinner than
tool
A. The shape of the cutter
in
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apply
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0.8
million
year
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years
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ago showed more dimension than that in 1.4
million
years ago.
Furthermore
,
tool
B was in lighter grey colour than
tool
A.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tool, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Stone Age
  • tools
  • cutting
  • development
  • rudimentary
  • sophisticated
  • progression
  • unworked pebbles
  • flake tools
  • bifacial tools
  • efficiency
  • materials
  • emergence
  • characteristics
  • functionality
  • craftsmanship
  • precision
  • hunting
  • carving
  • advancements
  • significance
  • human development
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