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The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart
compare
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compares
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 the difference
of
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in
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 the cutting tools between 1.4
millions
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million
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 and 0.8
miliion
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million
year
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years
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 ago.
Overall
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, the size of
cutting
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the cutting
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 remained
unchange
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unchanged
while
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 the size of the cutter became larger.
On the other hand
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, the cutter became thinner significantly. In detail,
both
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in both
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front
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the front
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 view and the back view, the
tool
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in
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apply
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0.8
million
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year
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years
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 ago was huger than that in 1.4
million
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 years ago. In
term
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terms
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 of cutting size, both of the
tools
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tool's
tools'
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instrument
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instruments
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 could chop the thing in 5cm. When we look at the side view of the tools, we can observe that
tool
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 B is much thinner than
tool
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 A. The shape of the cutter
in
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apply
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0.8
million
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year
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years
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 ago showed more dimension than that in 1.4
million
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 years ago.
Furthermore
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,
tool
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 B was in lighter grey colour than
tool
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 A.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tool, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Stone Age
  • tools
  • cutting
  • development
  • rudimentary
  • sophisticated
  • progression
  • unworked pebbles
  • flake tools
  • bifacial tools
  • efficiency
  • materials
  • emergence
  • characteristics
  • functionality
  • craftsmanship
  • precision
  • hunting
  • carving
  • advancements
  • significance
  • human development
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