Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced number of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree
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Living
technology
era. That is
because people nowdays
do not have to put more effort since they have Correct the word
nowadays
technology
to help them Add an article
the technology
facing
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face
the
problems. If you need to talk with someone that far away from you, you just type what you want to say and they will receive it in time and send the other emails or messages. Correct article usage
apply
Therefore
, the
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apply
technology
bring
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brings
the
other Correct article usage
apply
impact
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impacts
beside of
convenience.
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besides
First,
it will be loosen
the intimacy and solidarity between friends and families. Since we only chat by digital platform where you can not do anything except Change the verb form
loosen
typing
it, there is no essence about that. It will be way Wrong verb form
type
more
better if greet your family and friends directly so that there is physical touch and Change the word
apply
that is
a good thing for long term
Add a hyphen
long-term
relationship
without forgetting Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
the
others.
Soon Correct article usage
apply
afterward
, you will not Change the spelling
afterwards
going
anywhere and it Change the verb form
go
be going
is make
you lazy. Change the verb form
makes
Relying
anything Add the preposition
Relying on
Relying upon
into
gadgets will ruin your life. It will make you think that you do not need to go anywhere since everything Change preposition
on
be
guaranteed by the Change the verb form
is
technology
. It caused
you Wrong verb form
causes
be
lazy to socialize, even Add the particle
to be
it
is just for a small chat with the others. In spite of that, it will weaken your Correct word choice
if it
socialize
skill and it will affect your Replace the word
social
Correct your spelling
future
futur
In my opinion, Correct your spelling
future
i
agree that modern Change the capitalization
I
technology
have
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has
bad
impact Correct article usage
a bad
especially
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, especially
in
how people Change preposition
on
is communicating
. Their tight connection Wrong verb form
communicate
between
their friends and family will Change preposition
with
be vanished
and they might start Change to the active voice
vanish
have vanished
lost
their social Change the verb form
to lose
skill
even a human is a social creature.Fix the agreement mistake
skills
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