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write a letter to a friend who lives in a different City a. Tell him about your recent Job offer It. Tell him about your arrangement of a dinner C. inform about the arrangement of his accommodation

#friend #lives #city #job #offer #arrangement #dinner #c #accommodation
Deals Dasharath, I hope you doing well and I'm so thrilled to share some exciting news about my new job as
a
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electro mechanical
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electro-mechanical
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 technician. I was nervous
,
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apply
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while
 giving
interview
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the interview
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 as
their
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 were So many candidates in queue, but
hardwork
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hard work
 always
pay
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 off and they gave me
an offers
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offers
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 lettes after three
day
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days
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 of
interview
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the interview
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. To celebrate,
this
 special moment I have
decides
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 to through
party
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a party
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 for friends and closed ones, I have arranged dinner at the
taj hotel
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Taj Hotel
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. They have some
delicios
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delicious
 food and
extra ordinary
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extraordinary
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 services.
The
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They
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also
 have rooms for visitors, I have booked them in advance and I will send you a room number and
address
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the address
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Hotel
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the Hotel
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 on
monday
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Monday
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. Can't wait to see you
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General
Pay attention to accurate punctuation and capitalisation, particularly with proper nouns and the start of sentences.
Language Use
Ensure consistent tenses throughout the letter, reducing the mix of present and past tenses without a clear need.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use paragraphs to clearly separate your ideas, making sure each distinct topic is discussed in its own paragraph.
Completion
Consider adding a conclusion or closing statement to your letter to make it feel more complete and rounded off.
Detailing
Clarify and expand on specific details where possible, such as more information about the job or details about the dinner arrangements to enhance the task response.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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