You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn't able to play with you ay the weekend. You decide to writing to him in hospital, telling him about the match. -tell him which team won. -describe the conditions on the day. -say how you felt about the match.

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Dear Umid,
Hi
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how are you? I'm fine. Have you
recoved
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recovered
received
? I'm going to tell you about
game
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the game
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last
week. The
game
was great, but I'm sorry
four
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for
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your loss. I hope you
that
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engain
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again
engaging
in
game
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the game
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. Your place in the
game
is very well known.
This
is
game
strange. It is
game
interesting than were and our
game
have
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qon
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very
uncertain.
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we managed
Enemy
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group was
to
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very powerful. It had play much controversial state, if you are in
this
game
spectator had extremely much, going to watch that
game
.
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competition, I have to take a prize that day. The judge sir John was feel good yourself.
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our judges
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too you had
recognize
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. We have pass to
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- final, in the football
game
.
This
game
was
some
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comfortable situation but, wasn't
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use
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item. We
was
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to have a hard time
although
we
have
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very pleased, during
game
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the game
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since
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.
Enemy
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group have so very good plays,
after
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and after
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games
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the games
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they are
succes wish on
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. Best friend, Sadinova Feruza
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structure
Begin your letter with a proper greeting and end with an appropriate closing. This helps set the tone and context of your communication.
coherence
Use paragraphs to organize your letter into clear sections: greeting and enquiry about health, the match's outcome, conditions on the day, and feelings about the match. Each section should focus on a single topic.
task achievement
Address all parts of the task. Make sure to directly tell which team won, describe the day's conditions, and express how you felt about the match. These points should be clear and easily identifiable to the reader.
cohesion
To improve your cohesion, use linking words and phrases like 'Firstly', 'Moreover', 'In addition', 'However', 'Finally', etc. This will help the flow of your letter and make your ideas more connected.
grammar and accuracy
Proofread your letter to correct grammatical errors and improve clarity. Aim to use a range of sentence structures and vocabulary suitable for the task.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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