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You recently spend a night in a hotel and to put up with a great deal of noise very early to the morning because of a faulty central heating system. The manager promised to contact your regarding compensation but you still haven't heard from him. .Describe the problem at the hotel. . explain what the manager had said at the time. .say what you want the manager to do.

#night #hotel #noise #system #manager #contact #compensation #haven #time
Dear Sir or Madam The reason why I am addressing you is to explain my dissatisfaction
about
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 the
noise
 coming through the windows of the house I rent from you. For the
last
 two weeks since I received the house from
you
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you,
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 I have been suffering from
noise
 pollution.As
appointment
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the appointment
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 is located near
to
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a main road ,
high
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the high
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 engine
noise
 of passing
vehicle
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vehicles
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,and
also
 signals and
homs
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hits
 from heavy trucks are
cousing
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causing
 a great disturbance. The problem is not the location
the
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 vehicles but the thin layers of windows that do not really act as a barrier to
this
noise
.
Due to
the
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this
noise
pollution
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pollution,
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 it is very hard for me to concentrate on my studies, which causes me to spend learning hours ineffectively,let alone resulting in frustration.Even worse
continues
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continuous
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 traffic flow is a big disadvantage at nighttime because of
cousing
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causing
 sleep deprivation. Considering
that is
 impossible to ban traffic and change
location
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 of the flat , I think the obvious way would be
replacing
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 the current windows
into
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 thicker and
noise free
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noise-free
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 ones. I hope you will understand
this
 disturbing situation and will give a helping hand to solve
this
noise
 issue in the house. Best regards, Olimova Hulkar
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task achievement
It's crucial to closely follow the essay prompt. Your essay discusses a personal issue related to noise pollution from a rental property, not the hotel experience described in the prompt. Always ensure your content directly addresses the given topic.
coherence & cohesion
For better coherence and cohesion, structure your essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each body paragraph should explore a specific aspect of the issue, supported by examples or explanations.
task achievement
To strengthen your essay, provide clear, specific examples that demonstrate the impact of the issue. Rather than general statements, detail how the noise pollution affects your daily life and well-being.
coherence & cohesion
Consider revising your conclusion to more directly state your expectations or desired outcome from the person responsible. A clear conclusion helps reinforce your position and summary of the argument.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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