Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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their competitive skills,

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others

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deem that they should have to teach the benefits of teamwork

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of being competitive.

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the feeling of competition always triggers them to be successful in their task, I believe that cooperation teaches them how to assist

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. Highlighting the first aspect, competitive skill helps the adults to pre-set their goal. In order to get success in every field whether it would be study or sports they can indulge themselves to become a successful person by giving cut-throat competition to their opponents. Competitive examinations

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as civil services

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more likely in India,

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tough to crack owing to the high competition among youth.

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competitive

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youngsters to choose an unethical path to

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success because they feel demotivated when they are unable to achieve their goals. Shifting to another aspect,''Coperation''is perhaps the most prominent tool in

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strategies

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they can

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best illustration can be seen in school projects , the primary motive is to teach the

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how they can move forward with the assistance of their peers.

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agree that

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can develop their interpersonal skills and help

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through competitive nature

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believe that

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Task Achievement

Ensure the essay addresses all parts of the task. Provide a balanced discussion of both views before stating your opinion.

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Support your main points with more detailed examples. Use specific instances or studies to illustrate your arguments.

Coherence & Cohesion

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Coherence & Cohesion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

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Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some people believe that non-academic subjects at school should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Men do most of the high-level jobs. Should the government encourage a certain percentage of these jobs to be reserved for women? What is your opinion on that?

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would be little effects on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In the past, people used to travel abroad, so look for a minute differences from their home country. Nowadays cities throughout the world are becoming more and more similar. What are the reasons do the advantages of the disadvantages?