The popularity of online education has grown significantly in recent years. Do you think this positive or negative development? Over the last few years,online education is developing significantly in several modern countries. I believe that it has positive and negative sides.

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Most
people
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try to save their time and learn online type of
education
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. There are some useful
informations
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information
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and mod.cons
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the
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online
education
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.
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they can do their homework at night or
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in daytime
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when
you
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they
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have free time and conditions.
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that,famous foreign teachers can teach you
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you are sitting at home. The main reason why
people
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are using online
education
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is that modern
technology
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has already entered our lives. Online
education
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has many advantages for
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the young
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generation. All in all,I believe that it has more beneficial sides.
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,many American
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are studying
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online
education
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and
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way is very popular
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America .
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, regions and villages have no internet communication and
people
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have difficulties learning online
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.
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argument that
people
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misunderstand new
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and
lack
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the lack
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of ability to use information
technology
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could be the main reason why
people
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are not studying online. If they do have not enough equipment and qualified teachers they can not widen their horizons with the help of online
education
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.
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,they became less confident in studying online and they prefer
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face-to-face
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.
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,Indian
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are not studying
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online
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because I think their regions have no internet communication. In conclusion,
people
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have different choices about studying online or offline. They have to decide to use the new
technology
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and study in
world famous
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world-famous
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online courses.
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