The popularity of online education has grown significantly in recent years. Do you think this positive or negative development? Over the last few years,online education is developing significantly in several modern countries. I believe that it has positive and negative sides.
Most
people
try to save their time and learn online type of education
. There are some useful informations
and mod.cons Change the wording
information
pieces of information
at
Change preposition
of
the
online Correct article usage
apply
education
. Also
they can do their homework at night or Add a comma
Also,
daytime
when Change preposition
in daytime
you
have free time and conditions. Correct pronoun usage
they
Besides
that,famous foreign teachers can teach you while
you are sitting at home. The main reason why people
are using online education
is that modern technology
has already entered our lives. Online education
has many advantages for young
generation. All in all,I believe that it has more beneficial sides. Correct article usage
the young
For example
,many American people
are studying from
online Change preposition
apply
education
and this
way is very popular at
Change preposition
in
the
America .
Correct article usage
apply
On the other hand
, regions and villages have no internet communication and people
have difficulties learning online education
. This
is main
argument that Change the article
the main
people
misunderstand new technology
and lack
of ability to use information Correct article usage
the lack
technology
could be the main reason why people
are not studying online. If they do have not enough equipment and qualified teachers they can not widen their horizons with the help of online education
. As a result
,they became less confident in studying online and they prefer face to face
. Add a hyphen
face-to-face
For instance
,Indian people
are not studying from
online Change preposition
apply
education
because I think their regions have no internet communication.
In conclusion,people
have different choices about studying online or offline. They have to decide to use the new technology
and study in world famous
online courses.Add a hyphen
world-famous
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion