The popularity of online education has grown significantly in recent years. Do you think this positive or negative development? Over the last few years,online education is developing significantly in several modern countries. I believe that it has positive and negative sides.

Most
people
try to save their time and learn online type of
education
. There are some useful
informations
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and mod.cons
at
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of
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the
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apply
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online
education
.
Also
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they can do their homework at night or
daytime
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in daytime
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when
you
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they
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have free time and conditions.
Besides
that,famous foreign teachers can teach you
while
you are sitting at home. The main reason why
people
are using online
education
is that modern
technology
has already entered our lives. Online
education
has many advantages for
young
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the young
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generation. All in all,I believe that it has more beneficial sides.
For example
,many American
people
are studying
from
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online
education
and
this
way is very popular
at
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in
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the
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America .
On the other hand
, regions and villages have no internet communication and
people
have difficulties learning online
education
.
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is
main
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argument that
people
misunderstand new
technology
and
lack
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the lack
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of ability to use information
technology
could be the main reason why
people
are not studying online. If they do have not enough equipment and qualified teachers they can not widen their horizons with the help of online
education
.
As a result
,they became less confident in studying online and they prefer
face to face
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face-to-face
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.
For instance
,Indian
people
are not studying
from
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online
education
because I think their regions have no internet communication. In conclusion,
people
have different choices about studying online or offline. They have to decide to use the new
technology
and study in
world famous
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world-famous
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online courses.
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