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Unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs ( for example, working for charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to the younger children) To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many think secondary school students should give back to the public by rendering mandatory services. I disagree with that because, even though, partaking in these tasks is good. It can
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, be exhausting,
time consuming
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 and
also
 have a negative impact on their academic performance . On the one hand, high school programs are usually funded by the government.
Therefore
, it is only fair that students repay the support by offering
such
 help .
For example
, in Nigeria,
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 secondary schools
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 tuition
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 and
this
 money is gotten from taxes of civil servants. And as
such
, these scholars owe the society.
On the other hand
, these act of kindness involves both time and energy.
Thus
, it can cause a dip in academic performance because most
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scholars do not know how to balance work and education yet.
For instance
, average learners who have academic challenges plus household chores and
then
, have to work for the community, will be too tired
at the end
 of the day to even study.
This
 leads to poor educational achievements.
Also
, some learners have side jobs
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 they get paid for working. And so, they do not have time for extra societal tasks. Because
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 adding an extra compulsory task will be too cumbersome for their age and
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 less productivity and poor grades. I disagree that high schools should make community assistance compulsory cause secondary school students most times struggle to work and read. And
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 could have a negative effect
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 their classroom performance. In conclusion,
although
 it is good to help the community.
This
 act of service should be
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rendered voluntarily and not compulsorily .
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