The diagram shows how soft cheese is made

The diagram shows how soft cheese is made
The flow chart illustrates the sequence of steps in the process of making soft cheese. The whole procedure can be divided into five stages. The first stage involves mixing the water and milk in the container.
Then
the second stage starts with putting the mixture in the heater for cooling.
This
process should be held at 5
degrees
Celsius
and
last
for two
hours
. After that, we are going to add some salt and carry out fermentation. In
this
process, it will use 35
degrees
Celsius
for two
hours
.
Meanwhile
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the
liguid
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liquid
will turn
to
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thick
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a thick
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mixture.
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next stage, it comes to evaporation. It
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this
by evaporating the steam by holding it at 100
degrees
Celsius
for eight
hours
. In the
last
step, it
comes cooling
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at 5
degrees
Celsius
for eight
hours
.
Then
we separate the soft cheese through two filters, and
this
is the final product.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words degrees, celsius, hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pasteurization
  • Coagulation
  • Curd
  • Whey
  • Rennet
  • Cheddaring
  • Affinage (aging)
  • Brine
  • Cultures
  • Enzymes
  • Homogenization
  • Lactic acid bacteria
  • Mold ripening
  • Pressing
  • Ripening
  • Salt
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