The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The given picture illustrates how a central library used to look 20 years ago, and how it is in
present
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the present
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time.
Overall
, it can be seen that some changes have been implemented in the plan of the library.
While
,
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apply
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some
featured
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features
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have been removed, some new
aminities
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amenities
have been added to the
place
. Looking at the details, to the right from the entrance there was
a
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an
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enquiry desk where buying tickets, or
book
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booking
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returns took
place
, but now a cafe
is
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has
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replaced it.
Also
, going
further
up from the Enquiry desk, there
was
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were
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adult non-fiction
books
, which
is
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are
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no longer there, albeit you can find
there
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apply
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adult fiction
books
, an information desk, and three self-service machines
instead
of
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apply
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it
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apply
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.
In addition
, there were a pair of
table
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tables
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and chairs in the main hall of the library, which
are
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were
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removed. To the left
from
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of
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the entrance, a computer room is nestled,
where
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which
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used to be a reading room for reading newspapers and magazines. Above the computer room is a
place
for all reference
books
instead
of adult fiction
books
which used to be here 20 years past, replaced to another position. To the farthest point from the entrance to the left, a new section is built, which is children's fiction
books
with two sofas and where storytelling
take
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takes
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place
.
this
area was for CDs, videos and computer games.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • modern technology
  • computer stations
  • multimedia room
  • multi-purpose spaces
  • conference rooms
  • study spaces
  • community-oriented services
  • accessibility
  • wider aisles
  • ramps
  • designated areas
  • people with disabilities
  • cafeteria
  • coffee shop
  • leisurely space
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