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The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.

The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.
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The presented charts illustrate the average temperatures on a daily basis and the number of rainy
days
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 in two various
cities
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 in Australia.
Overall
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, it can be seen that in the first six months of the
year
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, the temperatures decreased in
both
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cities
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 and
then
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 rose to the end of the
year
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.
Additionally
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, rainy
days
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 in
Brisbane
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 were more than in Canberra in all mentioned years except a period from June to October. In detail, in Jan the maximum temperature for
both
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cities
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 was 27C.
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, in the six following months fall trends can be observed, before climbing to near 30C
at the end
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 of the
year
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.
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, in January, the minimum degree for
Brisbane
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 and Canberra was almost 20C and 12C respectively,
while
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both
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 places witnessed decline trends until they reached 10C and almost Ziro in July respectively. After that,
both
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cities
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' temperatures increased and reached the same degrees as in January. In terms of rainy
days
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, the most rainy
days
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 of a month belonged to Feb and Mar in
Brisbane
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 with 14
days
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, and
then
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days
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 with rainfall declined to 7
days
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 from June to September.
Brisbane
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 witnessed 12
days
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 of rainfall in Dec again.
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, in Canberra, the average number of rainy
days
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 was from June to October about 10
days
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,
whereas
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 the other months of the
year
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 experienced rainfall almost a week monthly.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words days, cities, year, both, brisbane, c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average daily maximum
  • average daily minimum
  • rainfall
  • degrees Celsius (°C)
  • anomalies
  • trends
  • geographic location
  • climate zones
  • seasonal changes
  • data representation
  • comparison
  • temperature range
  • weather patterns
  • statistical analysis
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