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Some people believe that everyone has a right to have access to university education and that goverment should make it free for all student no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the modern era, there is an ongoing debate about making
education
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 free for all educators. I fully agree with
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 statement and believe everyone has the right to have an
appropiate
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appropriate
education
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.
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 with, nowadays, there are a lot of financial barriers for some geniuses to shine in the science sky. In many countries, financial deprivation is
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 prevalent that individuals do not have the time to think about
school
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 and learning.
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, they should work hard to feed their families and themselves and
this
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 is all their concern.
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, In some
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developed
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 some societies and refugees can not attend
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 and college as well because of financial issues despite having higher talents and intelligence compared to many other students.
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, 20 per cent of
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 genius population
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 too poor to even get known. Governments can take a critical step to help the community by making
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free.
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, most families bear high expenses to provide suitable facilities for their children to
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 and making universities for nothing can help them a lot. In Iran,
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, if the government pays the
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 tuition, many parents would not be forced to work
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additional shifts.
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, If
edcucation
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education
 comes at no cost, many new students attend
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school
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 and experience
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equality and
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 the same
right
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rights
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 as others which can inspire them.
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,
this
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 issue can help
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more
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the
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teenagers to be more
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 society and make more friends which reduces the rate of mental disorders like depression.
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, I completely
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endorse
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making
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education
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 free for all and I think It will give the opportunity to new members of society to pursue their dreams and contribute to humanity.

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task response
Ensure each paragraph clearly presents one main idea, supported by specific examples. Detailed, real-life examples can enhance argument strength and relevance.
coherence and cohesion
Work on varying sentence structures to improve readability. Avoid too many simple sentences; mix in complex and compound sentences for variety.
task response
Make sure your essay addresses the prompt directly throughout. While agreeing with the statement, also consider briefly discussing potential counterarguments or challenges to provide a more nuanced view.
coherence and cohesion
Carefully proofread your essay for grammatical errors and typos. Consistent accuracy in grammar and spelling contributes greatly to clarity and professionalism.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access to education
  • Financial background
  • Higher education
  • Economic equality
  • Educational attainment
  • Government funding
  • Budget constraints
  • Public services
  • Quality of education
  • Scholarships
  • Merit-based
  • Equal opportunities
  • Financial aid
  • Universal access
  • Socioeconomic status
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