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Band 3

A lot of money is spent nowadays searching for oil. As the world's oil resources will eventually run out, it would be more logical to spend some of this money on developing new sources of power, such as wind and solar. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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year
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oil
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resources
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is
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.
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, many countries took a mount of money to look for it. It caused the resource
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 significantly. Some people
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this
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 would be a good time to find the new
energy
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 to be the replacement. I think the opinion has
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 point.
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,
oil
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 is a
limit
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resources
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energy
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,
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pollution it made as another problem for each country.
Oil
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 is made
by
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 fossil. It needs to be mine from the earth.
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, there
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limit
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place
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we
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could
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 discover
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oil
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. It is a challenge
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developed
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oil
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resources
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 or to keep the natural
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. Even more
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the process's products could cause some problems for the environment.
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, greenhouse.
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, developing new sources,
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 as clean
energy
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, could solve the problem
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caused
from
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oil
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 as
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a resources
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resources
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, solar
energy
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unlimited
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 amount to
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 outer space which means each person who has the equipment to store the
energy
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resources
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is not only avoid
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to emit
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pultion
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population
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also
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natural
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. In conclusion, I prefer
that
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developing new sources of power to replace the original
one
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. The reason is it is more
knidly
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kindly
 for
natural
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 by reducing the pollution emission and the new
energy
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resources
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task achievement
It's crucial to directly address the question prompt in your introduction. Your introduction should clearly state your opinion on whether it's more logical to invest in alternative energy sources instead of searching for oil. A thesis statement would greatly enhance clarity.
coherence & cohesion
Consider organizing your essay into distinct paragraphs, each focusing on a separate argument or point. This could include a paragraph on the limitations of oil as a resource, followed by another on the benefits of renewable energy sources. Each paragraph should start with a clear topic sentence.
task achievement
To better support your main points, include more specific examples and detailed explanations. For instance, you could describe how solar panels operate and their potential environmental and economic benefits. This would make your argument more convincing and comprehensive.
coherence & cohesion
Be mindful of grammar, spelling, and punctuation errors as they can detract from the clarity and professionalism of your writing. Consider using tools or resources to help identify and correct such errors.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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