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A lot of money is spent nowadays searching for oil. As the world's oil resources will eventually run out, it would be more logical to spend some of this money on developing new sources of power, such as wind and solar. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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task achievement
It's crucial to directly address the question prompt in your introduction. Your introduction should clearly state your opinion on whether it's more logical to invest in alternative energy sources instead of searching for oil. A thesis statement would greatly enhance clarity.
coherence & cohesion
Consider organizing your essay into distinct paragraphs, each focusing on a separate argument or point. This could include a paragraph on the limitations of oil as a resource, followed by another on the benefits of renewable energy sources. Each paragraph should start with a clear topic sentence.
task achievement
To better support your main points, include more specific examples and detailed explanations. For instance, you could describe how solar panels operate and their potential environmental and economic benefits. This would make your argument more convincing and comprehensive.
coherence & cohesion
Be mindful of grammar, spelling, and punctuation errors as they can detract from the clarity and professionalism of your writing. Consider using tools or resources to help identify and correct such errors.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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