The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons

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the picture

illustrate

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illustrates

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the data

how

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on how

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bricks

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were made for the building industry and

contained

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some steps before being delivered first of all, clay

are

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obtained from raw

materail

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material

after digging the ground which is

then

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passed through the metal grid before placing

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it on

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the rollers. next sand and water are

mix

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mixed

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with clay and delivered to either

making

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make

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a brick through wire- cutting method or using a moulding technique

following

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this

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these

bricks

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are dry in the over for two days straight

furthermore

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, after

drying

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the drying

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process

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they

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then

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delivered

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akiln

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a kiln

first heated at 200-980

degree

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after that the temperature goes higher to 870-1300

degree

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after free from

heating

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the heating

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process the

bricks

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are placed in

cooling

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chamber where are they are cool for about 48 to 72 hours and

finally

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the

bricks

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are packed and ready to be delivered

overall

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, it is vividly manifested that the process

contain

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seven steps

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beginning

begining

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beginning

with digging the clay and ending

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apply

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with the delivery stage

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

163 words

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