The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the pictures illustrate the data about the
bricks
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which were manufactured for industry building first of all, clay
are
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is
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obtained from raw
materail
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material
after digging the ground which is
then
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passed through the metal grid before placing
on
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it on
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the rollers. next sand and water are
mix
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mixed
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with clay and delivered to either
making
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make
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a brick through wire- cutting method or using a moulding technique
following
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this
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these
bricks
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are dry in the over for two days straight
furthermore
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, after
drying
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the drying
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process
it
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they
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then
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delivered
in
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to
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akiln
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a kiln
first heated at 200-980
degree
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degrees
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after that the temperature goes higher to 870-1300
degree
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degrees
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after free from
heating
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the heating
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process the
bricks
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are placed in
cooling
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a cooling
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chamber where are they are cool for about 48 to 72 hours and
finally
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the
bricks
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are packed and ready to be delivered
overall
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, it is vividly manifested that the process
contain
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contains
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seven steps
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beginning
begining
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beginning
with digging the clay and ending
up
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apply
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with the delivery stage
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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