The best way to teach children to cooperate is through team sports at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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learning supported by team sports at school, in
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that young people are not interested in reading books and waste time reading and memorizing all the books
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smart, they prefer an easier way, a way more practical where the children
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not infer that they are studying,
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methodology
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attention
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their
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all subjects, we can not teach math or
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thinking with sports at school,
also
it is important to say that not all the
schools
have the infrastructure for the practice of all sports and even if
this
schools
could have it, it is not a guarantee that
students
will apply and understand all
knowledge
that teacher is trying to explain. In
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, I agree with
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if the
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this
, but I think that not all subjects can be taught with
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tool. Some subjects
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or physics need a lot of
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theoretical
knowledge
and the
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need to read and memorize some books. In the end,
schools
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theoretical
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knowledge
, measured by a balance of the
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 satisfaction.
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In your main body paragraphs, develop your ideas more fully by providing specific examples and explanations. This can involve citing studies, referencing particular sports and their benefits, or detailing personal experiences/observations that support your points.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cooperation
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • values
  • applied
  • aspects
  • belonging
  • camaraderie
  • participating
  • essential
  • social skills
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