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The maps below illustrate how Frenton changed from 1990 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons.

The maps below illustrate how Frenton changed from 1990 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons.
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The maps demonstrate the changes of Frenton over a 22-year period between 1990 and 2012. As can be seen from the map, it is evident that Frenton witnesses
remakable
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remarkable
 developments. Most noticeably, the replacement of many buildings and the update of some places. In 1990, there was a blank ground on top of the cafe and park.
Then
, after 22 years, new flats are built. The houses in the east of the picture in 1990 were transformed into a new block of flats. Looking at the top in the north side, there used to be a place to play fields with trees but now it is chopped down to
constructed
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 a new block of flats, similar to the building in the east.
Similarly
to
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it
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, many trees
in
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on
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 the bottom side
are
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were
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 cut down,
then
 it was replaced
into
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with
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 a new technopark.The next
alternability
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alterability
inalterability
 is the
convert
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 of the bank - which is
in
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on
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 the left side, into a new restaurant.
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