The following diagram shows how greenhouse gases trap energy from the Sun. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Write at least 150 words.

The following diagram shows how greenhouse gases trap energy from the Sun.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

Write at least 150 words.
Contained in the diagram is information pertaining to how the energy is trapped by
greenhouse
gases
from the Sun.
Overall
, people 's inventions release
the
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apply
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greenhouse
gases
which trap the heat in the atmosphere The initial stage focuses on how
diffent
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different
ways people release
greenhouse
gasses.
Begining
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with
the
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transportation
as well as
the factory which use fossil
fuel
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fuels
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to run when
the
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machine
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machines
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burn that fuel causing lots of
gases
causing
greenhouse
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a greenhouse
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effect.
Moreover
, the
amount
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number
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of trees
drop
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drops
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causing the amount of carbon dioxide
is
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absorbed
decreased
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to decrease
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by
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from
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time to time. Accumulating
greenhouse
gases
which
is
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are
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not being absorbed by the tree trap the heat from sunlight is the focus
on
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of
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later
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the later
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step. By the time the sunlight
arrive
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arrives
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to
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on
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Earth, it will be neither radiated into space
or
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nor
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reflected off
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the amosphere
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amosphere
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atmosphere
. Alternatively, the heat is trapped by the amount of
greeenhouse
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greenhouse
gases
that human activities release.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words greenhouse, gases with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • natural process
  • greenhouse effect
  • Earth's surface
  • sun's energy
  • atmosphere
  • reflected
  • absorbed
  • re-radiated
  • greenhouse gases
  • carbon dioxide
  • methane
  • nitrous oxide
  • water vapour
  • ultraviolet radiation
  • infrared radiation
  • fossil fuel burning
  • deforestation
  • concentration
  • global warming
  • melting ice caps
  • glaciers
  • rising sea levels
  • extreme weather patterns
  • mitigating
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