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The following diagram shows how greenhouse gases trap energy from the Sun. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Write at least 150 words.

The following diagram shows how greenhouse gases trap energy from the Sun. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Write at least 150 words.
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Contained in the diagram is information pertaining to how the energy is trapped by
greenhouse
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gases
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 from the Sun.
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, people 's inventions release
the
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greenhouse
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gases
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 which trap the heat in the atmosphere The initial stage focuses on how
diffent
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different
 ways people release
greenhouse
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 gasses.
Begining
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 with
the
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transportation
as well as
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 the factory which use fossil
fuel
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fuels
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 to run when
the
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machine
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machines
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 burn that fuel causing lots of
gases
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 causing
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greenhouse
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a greenhouse
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 effect.
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, the
amount
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 of trees
drop
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drops
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 causing the amount of carbon dioxide
is
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absorbed
decreased
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to decrease
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by
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from
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 time to time. Accumulating
greenhouse
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gases
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 which
is
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are
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 not being absorbed by the tree trap the heat from sunlight is the focus
on
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of
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later
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the later
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 step. By the time the sunlight
arrive
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to
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on
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 Earth, it will be neither radiated into space
or
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nor
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 reflected off
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the amosphere
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amosphere
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atmosphere
. Alternatively, the heat is trapped by the amount of
greeenhouse
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greenhouse
gases
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 that human activities release.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words greenhouse, gases with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • natural process
  • greenhouse effect
  • Earth's surface
  • sun's energy
  • atmosphere
  • reflected
  • absorbed
  • re-radiated
  • greenhouse gases
  • carbon dioxide
  • methane
  • nitrous oxide
  • water vapour
  • ultraviolet radiation
  • infrared radiation
  • fossil fuel burning
  • deforestation
  • concentration
  • global warming
  • melting ice caps
  • glaciers
  • rising sea levels
  • extreme weather patterns
  • mitigating
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