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Your next door neighbour owns a small dog that barks throughout the day and the night . Write a letter to your neighbour requesting that something be done about the dog . Include in your letter: Your reason for writing What you would like to happen A nice, respectful style

#door #neighbour #dog #night #reason #style
Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to complain about
diffirent
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different
 dins. I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with
such
 kind of noises
have
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that have
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 been coming from your home because
your
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you
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owns
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own
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 a small dog that barks throughout the day and the night. I try to keep myself calm ,
altough
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although
, it makes me angry . It
bother
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bothers
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members of my family too. You have to know what
need
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needs
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 your animal. I demand that you take measures
againts
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against
 the noise . It will
good
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be good
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 for you that exchange your dog
another
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for another
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 one or move that will
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be
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comfortable
you
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for you
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 and your pet . I would be grateful if you find a solution
this
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to this
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 problem . I
will
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apply
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hope that it will not be repeated once more. Yours faithfully, Feruza
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structure
Your letter is broadly structured with a clear intent, but the organization of ideas could be improved. It's important that each paragraph has a singular focus. For example, the first paragraph could introduce the situation, the second could describe the specific problem, and the third could propose solutions or requests.
coherence
To improve coherence, connect your ideas more fluidly. Transition phrases such as “Furthermore,” “In addition,” or “As a result” can help with this. Also, ensure that each paragraph logically leads to the next to maintain the flow of your argument.
task response
The task achievement could be improved by directly addressing the task's prompts more fully. Make sure to clearly state the problem, your feelings, your expectations for a solution, and maintain a polite tone throughout. Providing specific examples of the disturbance caused by the dog could strengthen your case.
tone
Although the tone of the letter is suitably formal, there are instances where it could be more respectful and constructive, especially when proposing solutions. Suggestions should be made in a way that doesn't imply blame or demand. Instead, phrase your requests politely and offer potential solutions that are considerate of your neighbour.
accuracy
Pay attention to spelling, grammar, and punctuation to make your writing clearer. Common issues include misspellings ('diffirent dins' should be 'different kinds'), grammar errors ('your owns a small dog' should be 'you own a small dog'), and punctuation usage. Consider revising these areas for a more polished presentation.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • disrupted
  • challenging
  • appreciate
  • solutions
  • training
  • anti-bark collars
  • excessive barking
  • resources
  • well-being
  • distress
  • amicably
  • cooperation
  • concern
  • neighbourly relations
  • understanding
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