The charts below show the performance of a bus company in terms of punctuality, both actual and target (what actually happened compared to what the company was trying to achieve), and the number of complaints from passengers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The charts below show the performance of a bus company in terms of punctuality, both actual and target (what actually happened compared to what the company was trying to achieve), and the number of complaints from passengers.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The diagrams compare the difference
of
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between
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the actual and proposed
punctuality
of a bus company, and the
amount
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number
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of complaints made by passengers.
Overall
, Both
acutal
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actual
punctuality
and the number of
criticism
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criticisms
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are
in
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apply
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fluctating
trend
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trends
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while
target
punctuality
decreased
throught
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throughout
through
the year. The difference
of
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between
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the estimated and real
number
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numbers
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were
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was
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similar with the difference not
exceed
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exceeding
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5%. In detail, the real
amount
of the bus arrived on time started
with
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at
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85% in 1999 and dropped by 3% in 2000. Afterwards, it climbed to more than 84% in 2001 and fell to 84% in 2002. Eventually, the percentage of the actual ratio increased to
near
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nearly
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85% in 2003. In
term
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terms
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of the target ratio of
punctuality
, it began with the highest point at 86%,
then
it remained
unchange
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unchanged
for
year
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a year
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.
However
, the ratio dropped slightly to 85% in 2001 and
the
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apply
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this
goal
maintained
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was maintained
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until 2002.
Lastly
, the proposed percentage
reduced
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was reduced
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to just less than 85%. When it comes to the number of complaints, it started with around the quantity of 70 in 1999. Afterwards, it rocketed to the
amount
of 100 in 2000, followed by
the
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a
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drop to just more than 80 in 2001.
However
, the dissatisfaction of passengers
raised
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rose
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again in 2002 with the
amount
of more than 100 and reached a peak at 120 in 2003.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words punctuality, amount with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.

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