The table below gives data on tourists visiting in Vietnam from 8 different countries.

The table below gives data on tourists visiting in Vietnam from 8 different countries.
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The table below illustrates the information about the visitors from eight specific countries that travelled to
Vietnam
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in the year 2014 . Based on
overall
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data, the number of Chinese
people
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visited
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Vietnam
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was the highest,
while
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citizens from Cambodia were the lowest.
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, both the Chinese and
Cambodian
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Cambodians
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spent the least amount of money on their journey. The table information shows that
people
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from China, Korea, Japan and the USA were the most active visitors. About a million and a half
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Chinese, which is the biggest number of
people
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, chose
Vietnam
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for vacation.
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, for the citizens from Cambodia, the UK, Russia and Australia
Vietnam
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was
unpopular
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the unpopular
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place to go. Particularly, Cambodian had the smallest figure in the table - 187, 986 . When it comes to money, among all of the mentioned nationalities - Australians splashed out the highest amount on average and the
people
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from Cambodia consumed the lowest budget on their holiday.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vietnam, people with synonyms.
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