Many believe that learning a language at an early age is better while others think such language should be taught later. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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not only to the younger generations but to older generations too.
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whether the language needs to be introduced
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early age or later.
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my perspective ,I believe that with balance and
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Task Achievement
Your essay appears to be incomplete. Completing the essay will significantly improve your score as it shows you can develop a viewpoint fully and adhere to the task requirements.
Task Achievement
Clarify your thesis statement. A clear thesis in the introduction that outlines your opinion makes it easier for the reader to understand your stance and follow your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on developing your paragraphs. Each paragraph should present a single clear idea, supported by specific examples or reasons. This structural clarity enhances both coherence and task achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use linking words to better connect your ideas both within and between paragraphs. Phrases like 'Furthermore', 'On the other hand', and 'As a result' guide your reader through your argument, improving your essay's flow.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mimic
  • cognitive abilities
  • nuances
  • surface-level understanding
  • sophisticated learning strategies
  • critical thinking skills
  • intrinsic motivation
  • analytical skills
  • flexibility
  • sponge-like
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