The charts below give information about the people use public library and the main reasons to visti in Britain in 1991 in 2000.

The charts below give information about the people use public library and the main reasons to visti in Britain in 1991 in 2000.
The pie charts given
illustrates
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various reasons why people in Britain went to entry-free
libraries
in 1991 and 2000. From an
overall
perspective, it is evident that borrowing or returning books was the primary purpose of
libraries'
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visitors in both years.
In addition
, a new category was added
into
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libraries
' service, which was borrowing or returning videos. In 1991, the percentage of people who came to
libraries
to borrow or return books was highest, at 65%. Meanwhile, the figure for reading newspapers or magazines was lower, at 15%.
Furthermore
, the other two sectors accounted for the lowest value, at 10%. There was a significant drop in the proportion of citizens who intended to borrow or return books and read newspapers or magazines to 55% and 5%, respectively, in the final year.
Similarly
, the data on studying sharply fell from 10% in 1991 to 5% in 2000,
whereas
that
of
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obtaining information increased twofold to 20%.
In addition
, the library allowed its users to borrow or return videos, and
this
service made up 18%
at the end
of the period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Vocabulary: Replace the words libraries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Public library usage
  • Trends
  • Gender differences
  • Age demographics
  • Leisure reading
  • Academic research
  • User behavior
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Significant shifts
  • Implications
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