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(Table) The table below gives information related to population growth, average birth per woman, life expectancy at birth in countries with different income levels in 2000 and 2004. Summarise the information making comparisons where relevant.

(Table) The table below gives information related to population growth, average birth per woman, life expectancy at birth in countries with different income levels in 2000 and 2004. Summarise the information making comparisons where relevant.
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The data presented in the
table
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 outlines
population
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growth
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 rates, average births per
woman
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, and
life
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expectancy
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 at
birth
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 across
countries
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 categorized by
income
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 levels for the years 2000 and 2004.
Overall
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, the
table
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 shows
difference
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the difference
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 between
countries
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,
high
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high-income
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income
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countries
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has
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have
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least
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the least
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population
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growth
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, but the biggest
life
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expectancy
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.
Middle
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Middle-income
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income
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countries
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 have higher
birth
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 rates, but lower
life
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expectancy
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. And low
income
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countries
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 have the highest
population
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growth
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, but
they’r
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their
life
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expectancy
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 is significantly lower than in
two
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the two
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 previous
countries
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. as the
table
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 shows,
high
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high-income
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income
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countries
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 from 2002 to 2004
increasing
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increased
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 in
life
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expectancy
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 at
birth
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 from 78.0 to 78.7 but the
population
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growth
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is decreasing
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decreased
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 from 0.8 % in 2002 and 0.7% in 2004. average
birth
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 per
woman
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 stagnates at 1.7 throughout the given period .
Then
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 there are
middle
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middle-income
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income
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countries
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. They have higher
population
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growth
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,
higher
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and higher
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 average
birth
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 per
woman
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, but lower
life
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expectancy
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 at
birth
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 than
high
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high-income
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income
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countries
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. The
population
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growth
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 did not change in the time period, but the
birth
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 per
woman
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 decreased slightly.
Life
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expectancy
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 got longer, from 69,1 to 70 years. Next in the
table
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 come
low
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low-income
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income
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countries
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. They have
lowest
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a lower
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life
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expectancy
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 than
two
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the two
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 previous
countries
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, especially high
income
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, but have higher
population
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growth
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 and average
birth
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 per
woman
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. The
population
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growth
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 decreased
trough
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over trough
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 years
,
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apply
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 but still remains
the
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at the
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 top.
Same
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The same
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 can be said about
average
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the average
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birth
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 per
woman
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, it decreased
,
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apply
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 but still remains higher than
high
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high-income
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income
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countries
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.
Life
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expectancy
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 increased from 58,1 to 58,8, remaining
lowest
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the lowest
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 out of
three
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the three
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 65%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words table, population, growth, woman, life, expectancy, birth, countries, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Population growth rate
  • Average birth per woman
  • Life expectancy at birth
  • Income levels
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Correlations
  • Improvements
  • Declines
  • Statistics
  • Comparisons
  • High-income countries
  • Low-income countries
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