The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

The two pie charts provide information about the proportion of online purchases for goods sectors in Canada between 2005 and 2010. In

generally

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, it can clearly be seen that

the

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computer games and foodstuffs and beverages were upward trends

whereas

interior decorations and electronics and

device

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devices

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were downward trends during a 5-year period. Looking at data in more detail, in

term

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of eating and drinking

was

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noticeably rose from 22 per

cent

to 32 per

cent

, which is the highest increment within 5 years.

Similary

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Similarly

, the number of PC games was

significant

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increased around 18 per

cent

in 2005 to 23 per

cent

in 2010.

Conversely

, the percentage of house furnishings

was

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declined dramatically from 25 per

cent

to 15

percent

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respectively, which

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became

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last

place in 2010.

Furthermore

, the

porprotion

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proportion

of electronics and gadgets was

maginal

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marginal

magical

decrease

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from 35 per

cent

to 30

percent

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

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Topic Vocabulary:

retail sectors
online shopping sales
significant growth/decline
consumer behavior
market trends
economic factors
technological advancements
sales percentages
emerged
evolution
notable
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