The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

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The two pie charts provide information about the proportion of online purchases for goods sectors in Canada between 2005 and 2010. In

generally

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, it can clearly be seen that

the

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computer games and foodstuffs and beverages were upward trends

whereas

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interior decorations and electronics and

device

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devices

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were downward trends during a 5-year period. Looking at data in more detail, in

term

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of eating and drinking

was

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noticeably rose from 22 per

cent

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to 32 per

cent

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, which is the highest increment within 5 years.

Similary

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Similarly

, the number of PC games was

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increased around 18 per

cent

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in 2005 to 23 per

cent

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in 2010.

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, the percentage of house furnishings

was

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declined dramatically from 25 per

cent

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to 15

percent

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per cent

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respectively, which

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became

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last

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place in 2010.

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, the

porprotion

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proportion

of electronics and gadgets was

maginal

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marginal

magical

decrease

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from 35 per

cent

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to 30

percent

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per cent

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

147 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

retail sectors
online shopping sales
significant growth/decline
consumer behavior
market trends
economic factors
technological advancements
sales percentages
emerged
evolution
notable
constancies

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The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society. To what extent do you agree with this view?

You have just rented an unfurnished flat and a friend has told you about a shop that has cheap second-hand furniture. Write to the shop owner. In your letter: describe what you need ask whether they have these items and ask what they cost.

Children are now less active in their free time than in the past. Therefore, sports lessons must be compulsory in schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Expert say older people were happier and healthier in the past because they did more exercise and spent more time with their family and friends, whereas, now many suffer loneliness and health problems. What are the causes of this and what are some solutions?