The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.
The line chart compares the total
number
of foreign students
and local students
and the enrollments
of each In Australian universities from 2001 to 2010.
Overall
,the total number
of International students
kept rising due to
the continuous growth ot
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of
enrollments
whilst the total number
of local students
stopped increasing after 2007 as their enrollments
flactuated
in the given decade.
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fluctuated
fluctuate
According to
the information shown in the graph, there were 20000 international students
in total in 2001 which was twofold to the enrolled international students
in the same year. Over a decade, the number
of foreign pupils experienced a four times increase which
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apply
reached
80000 Wrong verb form
reaching
students
with 40000 enrollments
. On the other hand
, there were Correct article usage
a totally
totally
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400000
local ones in
2001 with almost 200000 local Change preposition
of 400000
enrollments
.However
, the total number
of local ones witnessed a plateau for the last
three years after it grew to 600000 pupils in 2007.Submitted by s99104032 on
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