The use of recreational drugs is on the increase, especially among young people. Describe the reasons for this worrying issue and provide suggestions to minimize it.

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drugs
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usage
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, especially among
teenagers
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, is currently in an increasing trend.
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and
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convenience
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of getting the
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;
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suggest
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to
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conduct
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disadvantages
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socalization and establish
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as
support
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systems that may hinder
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in trying the
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. Young people's recreational
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drugs
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consumption behaviour is driven by social
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and
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of the
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with, during the time when
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are socializing with each other, they usually are
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recreational
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. In several cases in Indonesia,
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among
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usually
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during a party. The
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, from the
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's point of view, help them to be relaxed;
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, they can enjoy each other company.
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, the increase
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drugs
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was attributed to
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convenience
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of getting the items. There is a case of
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distribution in Indonesia,
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, that was made possible by inserting the
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in a candy-like package.
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, given the social
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and
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to retrieve the
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, it explains why youngsters fall into consuming
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recreational
drugs
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. Given the fact that the increase
of
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drugs
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usage
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among
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is detrimental to the
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's life, I suggest two measures should be taken which are to conduct
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drugs
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disadvantages
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socialization
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and establish
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as
support
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systems.
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, students need to be exposed earlier to the downside of
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through socialization that can be conducted by schools. By understanding the danger, students are likely to avert
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drugs
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usage
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.
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,
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should monitor and
support
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their children especially to ensure they are occupied with positive activities only
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as learning, doing their hobbies, or volunteering in social activities. When the youngsters are busy with constructive activities, they will not have time to consume the
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.
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,
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drugs
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danger socialization and
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'
support
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are crucial in preventing young people from
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the
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drugs
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abuse. In conclusion, the rise of
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recreational
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happens because of social
pressure
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among
teenagers
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and easy accessibility to retrieve the
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. Since
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, I suggest two approaches to tackle the issues which are
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' danger socialization and parental
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system establishment.
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