A friend who lives in another country has invited you to come and stray with him/her on your next holiday. You are to busy to accept the invitation. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, -Thank him/her for the invitation - Explain why you cannot come - - Ask him/her about other time to visit
Dear Mohit,
I hope you are doing well in
you
life as always. How are you and your family? I know you all are missing me a lot that's why you Change the pronoun
your
send
me Wrong verb form
sent
a
invitation to visit you in my upcoming Change the article
an
holidays
.
Firstly
, I want to wish
thank Verb problem
apply
you
Correct pronoun usage
apply
to
you and your family Change preposition
apply
to send
me a special invitation to join you in America. I know you are Change preposition
for sending
also
having holidays
on
Change preposition
at
same
time and you want to spend together and enjoy it. You have a lot of plans for these Add an article
the same
holidays
. But, I am so sorry that I am not able to come there because my parents has
fixed my sister's marriage in these Change the verb form
have
holidays
so that I can attend it and help them in
arrangements. I am Change preposition
with
only
brother of my sister so, it's not possible for me to come Correct article usage
the only
at
your home for Change preposition
to
holidays
.
I have Correct article usage
the holidays
an
another idea that my sister Remove the article
apply
ids
Correct your spelling
is
also
missing you because you are a good and kind-hearted person. She also
wants to meet you. So,why not, you can also
come to her wedding and we will be having fun together. I know that you are like my family member, so do not need to send any invitation but I will make sure you will get one because from that you know about dates
of functions or bring your stuff Correct article usage
the dates
according to
that. If it's not possible then
it's ok I will visit you in my another
summer Correct quantifier usage
other
holidays
which will be about one month and we will spend it all together with
lots of fun.
Once again, I am so sorry that I am not able to join you in
Change preposition
apply
this
holidays
. I hope you will understand my situation.
Kind regards,
RohitFix the agreement mistake
holiday
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- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
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