The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021

The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021
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The graph provides information about the closing prices of invaluable metals
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avarage
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average
over the
period
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of the year from 2013 to 2021.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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platinum
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had the highest
price
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at the beginning, but it was the lowest
at the end
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of the
period
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,
whereas
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palladium had the opposite direction from
platinum
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.
However
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, the value of
gold
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has changed slightly over the past eight years. At the beginning of the
period
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,
gold
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and
platinum
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prices were relatively similar, and both slightly dropped until 2015.
However
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,
gold
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and
platinum
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remained considerably higher than palladium over the
period
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. In the first year,
platinum
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was estimated to have a value of nearly 1500
dollars
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per
ounce
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,
while
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gold
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was below
platinum
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.
After
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this
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, the
price
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of
platinum
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dropped considerably to around 1000
dollars
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per
ounce
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, in the same way that
gold
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experienced a drastic decrease to 1200
dollars
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in 2015. In 2021,
gold
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had a dramatic rise to almost 2000
dollars
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per
ounce
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.
On the other hand
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,
platinum
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had a small dip, and
then
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it rose to just over 1000
dollars
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per
ounce
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in the
last
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year. Turning to
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palladium
, it was just 800
dollars
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per
ounce
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, which was the lowest
price
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of all metals. It marginally dropped to nearly 500 in 2016,
while
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it saw considerable growth to 2400
dollars
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in 2021
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when its
price
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reached its peak.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, platinum, price, gold, dollars, ounce with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "considerably" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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