The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the US from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparions where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the US from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparions where relevant.
The given line graph compares the ratio of five different kinds of technology including washing
machine
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machines
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,
computer
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computers
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, internet,
phone
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phones
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and DVD
player
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players
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that
was
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were
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used by American people in their
home
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homes
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during the years 1995 to 1999.
Overall
, it can
abviousley
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obviously
see
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seen
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that despite DVD players, which
a
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fall and rise experience during the first year, all gadgets follow
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a mor
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mor
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more
or less increasing pattern. Back to the details, washing machines were the most used appliances over the time reported in the graph by 60% of households at the
begining
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beginning
to 80 per cent
at the end
in
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of
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1999,
additionally
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to its upward trend. The next most applicable technology for Americans was computer devices which starting point of the line in 1995 shows 40% of usage that had
expereinced
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experienced
an about 20
percent
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per cent
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increase, approximately parallel to the washing machine line, before reaching the peak in 1999. The third
popular
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most popular
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tech was
phone
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a phone
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with a sharper lift after 1996 to reach the popularity of two other preceding technology in 1999 by more than 60 % of domestic use. Internet and DVD players were used less as the the recorded values
shows
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show
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adoption rates
  • technological proliferation
  • year-on-year growth
  • digital divide
  • saturation point
  • laggard technology
  • consumer electronics
  • technological obsolescence
  • internet penetration
  • market dynamics
  • socioeconomic factors
  • innovation trajectory
  • connectivity infrastructure
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