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maps show how the village of Stokeford had changed from the year of 1930 until 2010.

maps show how the village of Stokeford had changed from the year of 1930 until 2010.
The provided figure depicts how the village of Stokeford had developed for many decades from the year
of
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1930 to 2010.
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, it is
obvious
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 seen that the farmland had
removed
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, and the households had
growth
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repidtively
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respectively
 in the next 80 years. First of all, the farmland
place
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 had been
remove
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removing
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 in the next many
decade
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, and the
constuction
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construction
 of the homeland has significantly soured. In 1930, there
are
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 a few accommodations surrounded by farmer's
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place
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places
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, the bridge located at the north, the river behind, beside the little shops, post office, and the
infont
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infant
 primary school around people's living
place
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. Next in
the
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2010, the shops
had
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 removed, and the
proerty
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property
had
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 added
in
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 the area.
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Also
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 the school was renovated into
the
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a
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 larger
place
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.
Ultrimately
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Ultimately
, there
are
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is
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 a
place
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 of living
go
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going
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long
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 with the liver Storke. The Retirement home was expanded to a bigger
place
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 too.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words place with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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