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the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee nd tea buying and drinking habits

the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee nd tea buying and drinking habits
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The provided figure represents the percentage of communities who were a big fan of
coffee
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 and tea spending and drinking habitats, in five different places. The data is presented in the percentage.
Overall
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, it is obvious that the cafe trend was popular and not many people drank
a
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apply
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fresh
coffee
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 in the past few weeks. In terms of population buying
coffee
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 from the cafe was almost popular in these five countries, but they are not for Adelaide, in
this
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 place habitat of people was buying that instant one, which was only 1% higher. The instant raw caffeine graph was higher than buying fresh
coffee
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 in every place. Starting with Sydney and Melbourne there was less than a 10% difference between these two. For
other
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the other
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 three provinces, the percentage was different by more than almost half.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • percentage
  • frequency
  • preference
  • health benefits
  • caffeine content
  • cultural significance
  • consumption
  • trends
  • venues
  • social aspects
  • beverage
  • shift
  • influence
  • comparison
  • analysis
  • discussion
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