The bar chart shows the highest qualification attained by sex for the working age population in wales in 2001/2002 summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relavant.

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The given bar chart illustrates the

hightest

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highest

qualification

obtained by gender for

the

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working age residents in

wales

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Wales

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in 2001/2002.

Overall

although

degree

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a degree

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or a higher education

qualification

was less in

wales

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Wales

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in 20001/2002 , GCE A level or GCSE grade A-C level qualifications are comparatively greater in percentage. Other than that, males had

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slighty

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slightly

qualification

in higher

qulification

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qualification

exams compared to females. In detail, GCSE grade A-C or

equivalant

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equivalent

qualifications were more with the female , with a recorded value

slghtly

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slightly

below 30%, and nearly 10%

differnce

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difference

with

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from

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males,

by contrast

in GCE A level males were more qualified than females with nearly the same 10% difference.

Furthermore

, boys

holded

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held

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a degree in approximately 14 % ,and girls achieved

same

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the same

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qualification

only in 11%, on the

contary

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contrary

, higher education qualifications

had been

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were

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achieved more by females with a approximately 2%

different

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difference

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However

, around 25%

girls

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of girls

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had no

qualification

compared to that value of 20 % for the boys.

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