The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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There are
two
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maps that perspectively illustrate the situations of a
road
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accessing
to
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a
city
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hospital in 2007 and 2010.
According to
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them, it is apparent that there were plenty of modifications
of
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to
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the
road
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itself
as well as
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its
surroudings
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surroundings
. In 2007, there were
two
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roads
cross connected
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and formed a junction in the south of the
city
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hospital, one was a west-east directional
road
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named
City
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Road
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,
the
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other was a north-south
directioned
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direction
road
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named Hospital
Road
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, leading to the front door of the hospital and connecting with a ring
road
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sourrounding
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surrounding
it. Six bus stops were
also
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separated into
to
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two
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parts and situated on
the
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apply
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both sides of the Hospital
Road
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. Apart from that, a rectangle-shaped
car
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park
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for staff and
public
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the public
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was
also
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costructed
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constructed
on the left side of it. In 2010,
this
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area had been greatly redeveloped. It was noteworthy that
two
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roundabout
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roundabouts
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appeared, one was built at the junction of the
City
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Road
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and Hospital
Road
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,
the
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other was added in front of the
City
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Hospital. These
two
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roundabout
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roundabouts
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connected with a bus station, which took place the former six bus stops and located in the left area of the Hospital
Road
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. What's more, the previous
car
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park
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was only used by
staffs
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staff
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and a new public
car
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park
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was constructed on the eastern part of the hospital, residents could enter it through the Ring
Road
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. In summary, the
road
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leading to the
city
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hospital
had been
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completely redesigned from 2007 to 2010, particularly in the construction of the
two
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roundabouts and public
car
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park
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, making it a more convenient place for residents nearby.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words two, road, city, car, park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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