The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.
The diagram depicts the stages involved in making
bricks
for the building industry.
Overall
, there are seven stages in brick manufacturing, starting with the digging of clay
and finishing with delivering it to its destination.
Initially
, the clay
is dug from the ground using a large digger, after which it is placed onto a metal grid which is utilized for breaking the clay
into smaller pieces. Four rollers assist in this
step. The next stage is to add water and sand to the clay
and make brick from the mixture by putting it in either a wire cutter or a mould.
As a subsequent stage, raw bricks
are then
put in an oven where they dry for between 1 and 2 days. Subsequently
, after being dried in the oven, the bricks
are heated in kilns initially
at a moderate temperature (200-980 Celcius) and later at a high temperature (870-1300 Celcius), before undergoing a cooling process using a cooling chamber for 2 and 3 days. As a final step ready bricks
are packaged and delivered to their target.Submitted by naira.gumar on
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