The table below shows how young people in Tokyo, Japan, listen to music over the previous month. the pie chart shows a record company international finding about whether people preferred live or recorded music. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relavant.

The table below shows how young people in Tokyo, Japan, listen to music over the previous month. the pie chart shows a record company international finding about whether people preferred live or recorded music.

summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relavant.
The given table illustrates the methods of how youngsters in Tokyo, Japan, listened to
music
over the
last
month, and the pie chart depicts the international findings of a record company in
related
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to the
individuals
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individual's
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preference
of
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for
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live or recorded
music
.
Overall
,
Japanees
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Japanese
teens
have
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apply
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listen
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listened
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the
music
via four different methods ,
such
as live
music
,
mp3
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MP3
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players
,
internet
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the internet
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and CDs ,and with
highest
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usage of MP3
players
to
listen
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listen to
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music
.
By contrast
, international findings
has
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have
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revealed
the
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that
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live
music
as
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is
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the most
prefered
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preferred
method to listen
music
.Other than that, the table
reveled
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revealed
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a drastic difference between males and females
how
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in how
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they listen to
the
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apply
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music
. In detail,
Japanees
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Japanese
males
used
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use
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MP3
players
to
listen
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listen to
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music
79% of the
time
and they
have
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apply
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listened
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listen
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listen to
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live
music
only 60% of the
time
.
However
, females only 40% of the
time
used
the
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apply
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MP3
players
and they
tried
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tried to
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live
music
over 44% of the
time
, Admitttedly, both
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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used CDs
leaste
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least
to
listen
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listen to
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music
.
Beside
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this
,
according to
international
findings
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findings,
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70% of individuals
had
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apply
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preffered
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preferred
the
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apply
show examples
recorded
music
and only 26 % of them selected
the
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apply
show examples
recorded
music
.
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