The table below shows how young people in Tokyo, Japan, listen to music over the previous month. the pie chart shows a record company international finding about whether people preferred live or recorded music. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relavant.
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The given table illustrates the methods of how youngsters in Tokyo, Japan, listened to
music
over the last
month, and the pie chart depicts the international findings of a record company in related
to the Replace the word
relation
individuals
preferenceChange to a genitive case
individual's
individuals'
of
live or recorded Change preposition
for
music
.
Overall
, Japanees
teens Correct your spelling
Japanese
have
Unnecessary verb
apply
listen
the Change the verb form
listened
music
via four different methods ,such
as live music
, mp3
Correct your spelling
MP3
players
, internet
and CDs ,and with Correct article usage
the internet
highest
usage of MP3 Change the article
the highest
players
to listen
Add the preposition
listen to
music
. By contrast
, international findings has
revealed Change the verb form
have
the
live Correct determiner usage
that
music
as
the most Correct your spelling
is
prefered
method to listen Correct your spelling
preferred
music
.Other than that, the table reveled
a drastic difference between males and females Correct your spelling
revealed
how
they listen to Change preposition
in how
the
Correct article usage
apply
music
.
In detail, Japanees
males Correct your spelling
Japanese
used
MP3 Wrong verb form
use
players
to listen
Add the preposition
listen to
music
79% of the time
and they have
Unnecessary verb
apply
Change the verb form
listened
listen
live Add the preposition
listen to
music
only 60% of the time
. However
, females only 40% of the time
used the
MP3 Correct article usage
apply
players
and they tried
live Add the particle
tried to
music
over 44% of the time
, Admitttedly, both male
and Fix the agreement mistake
males
female
used CDs Fix the agreement mistake
females
leaste
to Correct your spelling
least
listen
Add the preposition
listen to
music
.
Beside
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Besides
this
, according to
international findings
70% of individuals Add a comma
findings,
had
Unnecessary verb
apply
preffered
Correct your spelling
preferred
the
recorded Correct article usage
apply
music
and only 26 % of them selected the
recorded Correct article usage
apply
music
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