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Today more countries import food from different parts of the world. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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World
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The world
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 is becoming a global village with the advancement of technology, which resulted in more exchange of different commodities like infrastructure, electronic goods
and
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apply
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food
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,
this
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 tendency has its benefits and drawbacks too; which are discussed in
ensuring
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ensuing
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 paragraphs. To commence with, different meal options, makes a wide variety of cuisines accessible to people, which not only
let
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 them get confronted with new
taste
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tastes
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 but
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make
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 them eager about
ingredients
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the ingredients
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 used to make
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. In
this
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 way, they learn about new cultures and traditions as well and adopt those.
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; Burger
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 is becoming is becoming a global phenomenon.
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, international trading helps in stabilizing
food
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 prices when there is
shortage
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a shortage
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 of daily bread during natural disasters.
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; Importing grains at
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 time of drought can prevent prices and
saves
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 people's
life
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lives
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 as well. External trade
increase
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increases
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food
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 standard quality among nations because they do not want to export bad
edibles
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 items to another country. Despite the advantages above, we can not overlook the disadvantages. Importing daily bread from other nations can undermine local farmers and
leading
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 to
loss
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the loss
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 of local agriculture.
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; the importation of cheap grains,
drive
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drives
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 small scale farmers out of business.
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, many local farmers shut down their businesses, which resulted in unemployment in local areas.
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 that,
increase
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 in carbon footprints
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transportation
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the transportation
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 of goods over long distances
harming
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harms
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 the environment. To
examplify
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exemplify
, the environmental damage in shipping fruits and vegetables from India to
canada
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Canada
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.
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, It
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increased
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 the risk of spreading diseases through fruits and vegetables, in
local
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the local
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 ecosystem.
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, a fruit from another nation with a plant disease can spread the disease
in
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 other countries.
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, If there are benefits of importing meals from other countries like
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the variety
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 of eatables,
increasing
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and increasing
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 quality of
food
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than
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then
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can-not
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cannot
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 overlook the drawbacks like depleting local business and costs which a nation
spend
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 in exchange 
of
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for
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 goods.

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Task Achievement
To enhance the Task Achievement score, ensure that your response fully addresses all parts of the task. This involves discussing both the advantages and disadvantages in depth and providing a balanced view. Consider expanding on your points by dedicating a separate paragraph to each advantage or disadvantage, which allows for a more thorough exploration.
Coherence and Cohesion
For Coherence and Cohesion, aim to improve the logical flow of your essay. Use a range of cohesive devices effectively, and ensure paragraphs are well-developed with clear topic sentences. Organizing your ideas into distinct paragraphs for each main point can enhance readability and structure.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diversifies
  • cuisines
  • undermine
  • local agriculture
  • influx
  • stabilizing
  • crop failures
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • food safety standards
  • exporting
  • importing
  • ecosystems
  • global phenomenon
  • stringent
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