In many countries nowadays, more and more women have full-time jobs as men, so there is logic that men and women should share the housework tasks equally. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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the
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fact that nowadays the majority of countries
treated
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equally
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men
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in terms of
job
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right
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it is a commonly held belief
women
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should
be
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work full-time.There are
also
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an argument
opposes
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that opposes

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it.In my opinion,
i
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I

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consider that
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working full-time
it
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apply

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would be a huge benefit not only for
economic
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system but
also
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to utilize
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her
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their

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skills.
To begin
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with,
Support
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women
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is really crucial to
improv
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improve

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our community because when she
working
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works

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full-time she
get
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gets

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payed
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paid

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same
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the same

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men
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men's

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sallery
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salary

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In other
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words
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words,

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There are many advantages to
make
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making

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women
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working full-time
women
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more
creativity
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creative

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and most
of
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customer
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customers

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prefer
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prefer to

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make
deal
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deals

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with female
worker
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workers

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than
male
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males

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.In
addision
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addition

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,Time management could help
women
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to do household
beside
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besides

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their job.
For example
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,
According
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the
last
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study in
japan
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Japan

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the most successful
women
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those working full day. Another point to consider,sharing responsibility is important.
Men
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should
be having
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have

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knowledge
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the knowledge

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to deal with house
task
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tasks

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and look after kids.It is possible to say that life
need
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needs

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more cooperation it
help
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helps

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to less
strees
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stress

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and
decrease
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the conflict with
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moreover
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Moreover

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,
family
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families

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with two parents
employees
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and employees

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are much
happer
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happier

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versus
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with their not working.
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although
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many negative
consequenses
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consequences

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for kids, their parents
working
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work

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full-time but still
having
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have

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good
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a good

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chance to live their life without budget
deffect
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deficit
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. In conclusion,
despit
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despite

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people having different views.I believe that the main purpose of the government
to
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is to

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engage
women
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in the job market because they
belief
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believe

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they can work like
male
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males

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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