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Write a letter to your neighbour about the damage that occurred to your car while he was parking his car in the lane outside your home. In the letter, you should: describe the damage say how you feel about this problem suggest to him what actions he should take.

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Dear Thomas, I hope you are doing well, I am writing a letter pertaining to one problem which I came across
hence
 I feel that I must tell you as a good neighbourhood.
Last
 night, I noticed that you parked your
car
 outside my home I have no problem but unfortunately
while
 parking your
car
 you damaged my
car
 from
right-side
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the right-side
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 of
front
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the front
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 door
and
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apply
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which is not under insurance, it is giving me a problem as I will have to bring my
car
 at garage and
also
 need to spend money from my pocket only. I can
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understand
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under stand
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understand
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 that, you are well trained driver and know about all parking rules and regulations but you parked
car
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a car
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 in my area which is dedicated and
alloted
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allowed
 for my vehicles
not
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, not
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 for others, I request you, please
going
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 ahead Please do not park
you
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your
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car
 in
this
 area and use your dedicated parking area to avoid
this
 kind of
problems
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problem
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. I
will
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apply
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look
forword
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forward
 to your positive response on
same
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the same
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 and wish
a
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you a
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have
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great time ahead. Thank you for your understanding. Regards, Rahul
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coherence cohesion
Be sure to fully develop each paragraph with clear explanations of your points. Ensure that each paragraph contains a single, clear idea that is expanded upon with examples or explanations.
coherence cohesion
Maintain a consistent logical flow throughout your letter by clearly connecting your ideas and using appropriate transitional phrases.
coherence cohesion
Include a proper greeting and closing to adhere to the formalities of letter writing. While you've done this, refining your language to be more formal or appropriate can improve the overall tone.
task achievement
Ensure your letter addresses all parts of the task. Describe the damage in more detail, express your feelings more vividly, and provide a clearer and more formal suggestion for how your neighbour can rectify the situation.
task achievement
Use a tone that is suitable for writing to a neighbour. While maintaining politeness, ensure your message is clear and your request is assertively made, without sounding aggressive or overly casual.
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