Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?
Lot’s
of museums charge for admission Change noun form
Lots
while
others are free. What’s
the advantages and the disadvantages of charging people’s fees in museums?
During the past few Wrong verb form
What are
years
Add a comma
years,
lot’s
of museums Change noun form
lots
charges
people fees, but Wrong verb form
have charged
present
they don’t really charges fees, because of the government and Change preposition
at present
the
foreigners. But it really depends on which country Correct article usage
apply
people’s
at. For Change the verb form
people are
examples
in Taiwan Fix the agreement mistake
example
charges
Correct subject-verb agreement
charge
fee
when you enter the Fix the agreement mistake
fees
museum
because they want to make money, and also
lot’s
of items in the Correct quantifier usage
lots’s
museum
are history they spend a lot
time Add the preposition
lot of
to manage
them and keep them Change the verb form
managing
looks
well and special so that’s why they needed Wrong verb form
looking
fee
to enter the museum
In my opinion
paying the entrance Add a comma
opinion,
fee
to get into the museum
Add a comma
museum,
it’s
not a bad thing, because it means that it's really special and it’s
really protective so that’s why I think that it is fine to pay the entrance fee
and that’s also
the advantages
. The Fix the agreement mistake
advantage
disadvantages
is maybe the foreigner will think Fix the agreement mistake
disadvantage
it’s
too expensive to pay the entrance fee
or it’s
unfair, because some of the country
will compare the price if people Change to a plural noun
countries
is
the Verb problem
apply
citizen
or not, so I think they should put everyone in the same price so people won’t argue with itFix the agreement mistake
citizens
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