Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

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of museums charge for admission
while
others are free.
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the advantages and the disadvantages of charging people’s fees in museums? During the past few
years
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lot’s
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of museums
charges
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have charged
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people fees, but
present
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they don’t really charges fees, because of the government and
the
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foreigners. But it really depends on which country
people’s
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at. For
examples
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in Taiwan
charges
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fee
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fees
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when you enter the
museum
because they want to make money, and
also
lot’s
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of items in the
museum
are history they spend a
lot
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time
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them and keep them
looks
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well and special so that’s why they needed
fee
to enter the
museum
In my
opinion
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opinion,
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paying the entrance
fee
to get into the
museum
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museum,
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it’s
not a bad thing, because it means that it's really special and
it’s
really protective so that’s why I think that it is fine to pay the entrance
fee
and that’s
also
the
advantages
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. The
disadvantages
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disadvantage
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is maybe the foreigner will think
it’s
too expensive to pay the entrance
fee
or
it’s
unfair, because some of the
country
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countries
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will compare the price if people
is
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the
citizen
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citizens
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or not, so I think they should put everyone in the same price so people won’t argue with it
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Admission fee
  • Revenue stream
  • Maintenance
  • Overcrowding
  • Commercialization
  • Cultural heritage
  • Diverse attendance
  • Community ownership
  • Access to culture
  • Visitor experience
  • Exhibit quality
  • Cultural mission
  • Reliance on funding
  • Government subsidies
  • Cultural accessibility
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