In many countries, students attend private 'cram schools' for extra coaching in test-taking techniques. What is your view of this practice?

In many counties, students attend private “cram
schools
” for extra coaching in test-taking
techiques
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techniques
. It's very important for students, because extra-school
have
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a lot of advantages, but a lot of disadvantages. In my point of view, students who want to pass exams well need to have additional courses and cram
schools
can provide
this
. That's why, I can say that cram
schools
are
really
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good way to improve your own skills and pass your exams. I will try to prove it by making a few arguments. On the one hand, additional classes help you to remember certain topics better but it doesn’t provide new
knowledges
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this
is a big disadvantage of cram
schools
.
However
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a huge number of reviews allows us to understand that additional classes have good results.
On the other hand
, now the majority of additional
education
are
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paid with the exception of government organizations, not only
schools
,
therefore
this
type of
education
isn't accessible to everyone. But If you have enough money to study in extra
schools
it will be
really
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good boost
of
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your skills and you will pass your exams, because there are a lot of good teachers with a
diplom
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diploma
of higher
education
and experience of
studing
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studying
people.
To sum up
, I would
to
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say that it will be a great
education
program, if additional leaching became free by becoming part of the extra school
this
will
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allow
education
to become accessible but
this
is most likely impossible
,
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because not all tutors want to work in
schools
due to
low salaries, it is more profitable for them to work individually.
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