Billions of dollars are spent on Space research every year. Instead, this money could be used to improve living conditions of people on Earth. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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are of the view that spending
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surfing
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is wasting
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due to
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Earth
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completely
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space
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has no benefit for the public and there are many problems
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which are more important than surfing the
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has no more results until now. They believe spending
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on these useless tasks has no positive effect on ordinary
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people
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published a paper on its website in 2020 which indicated that
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spent over $10 billion
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its failed projects. Analyzers argue that it is not important for ordinary
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because they believe that they have more important issues
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their
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. Another reason is that there are many unsolved problems on the
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which can be solved if government allocate enough
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to them.
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pollution is an important issue for our planet, and it has posed
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threat
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to ought more budget on solving
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role
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our
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life
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of spending men and women to the moon or surfing on the
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. In conclusion, from my point of view, there are a lot of issues related to our
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also save
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the
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that are more important compare to wasting
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