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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measure do you think might be effective?

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Raising the costs of gasoline and fuel is the most excellent method to solution of Increasing traffic
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 and pollution
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. I tend to agree with the essay because I think
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. One of the best solutions to raising traffic and pollution issues is to improve the costs of petrol and gasoline.
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 and bicycles in big cities.
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, the government ought to improve public
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. In
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 case, the government should construct a bicycle lane beside the street in an enormous city. All in all, Increasing petrol and gasoline prices will be the best solution to raising pollution and traffic and an effective way to control issues. I strongly agree with the idea because maybe
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Task Response
To enhance task response, ensure your essay fully addresses the question, offering a clear opinion and discussing alternate measures beyond increasing petrol prices. Integrate varied and specific examples to strengthen your arguments.
Coherence & Cohesion
For better coherence and cohesion, organize your essay more logically. Start with an introduction that presents the topic and your opinion, followed by body paragraphs that each focus on a single idea, and conclude with a summary of your points and opinion. Use a variety of linking devices to connect ideas within and between paragraphs.
Task Response
Include more specific examples and evidence to support your main points. Rather than general statements, offer detailed examples or data that illustrate how increasing petrol prices or using public transport can solve traffic and pollution problems.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • air pollution
  • alternative modes of transport
  • cleaner energy sources
  • disproportionately affect
  • commuting
  • public transportation infrastructure
  • environmentally friendly
  • incentivizing
  • electric vehicles
  • fossil fuels
  • regulations and penalties
  • emissions
  • urban planning
  • walkability
  • cycling-friendly
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