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the graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

the graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.
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The graph below illustrates the amount of
enquiries
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 received by the
tourist
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information
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 office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.
Overall
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,it is evident that the biggest number of
enquiries
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 for
tourist
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information
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 were in person. To commence with the biggest amount of
enquiries
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 by
tourist
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information
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 showed in person, which accounted for a bit over 400.
Then
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 there was an up
trend
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 started in February, which made up approximately 600.
Moreover
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, in April there was the same
trend
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, which comprised over 1200.
Last
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 but not least, in June there were maximum
numbers
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 , which accounted for about 1900.At the same time,there were similar statistics for
enquiries
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 for
tourist
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information
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 by telephone, which started in January and made up 900 and
then
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 there was an up
trend
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 which accounted for 1600 in June. When it comes to the opposite
trend
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 , which was the statistics by letter or email, which started in January and comprised 790 and
then
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 there was a downtrend.
Furthermore
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, in March the
numbers
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 showed the lowest
numbers
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, which made up 740. It may be concluded that statistics of
enquiries
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 received by the
tourist
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information
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 showed that the biggest
numbers
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 were by in person.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words enquiries, tourist, information, trend, numbers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • in person
  • by letter/email
  • by telephone
  • general trend
  • six-month period
  • significant increase
  • steady rise
  • decline
  • peak
  • fluctuations
  • monthly data
  • comparison
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