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The graph show changes in spending habits of people in the UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to university lecturer describing the data. Write at least 150 words.

The graph show changes in spending habits of people in the UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to university lecturer describing the data. Write at least 150 words.
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The
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pie charts
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show
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, how the habits
were spended
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spent
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 by the
peoples
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people
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 in England changed from 1971 to 2001. The habits
divided
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are divided
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 into 7 categories including Books, Computers, Furniture,
Restourants
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restaurants
, Petrol, Cars, and
foods
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food
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.
Overall
,
the
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a
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 rapid glance
on
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at
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graphs
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the graphs
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 indicates that the most
spended
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spent
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 routine was Food with 44 per cent of
whole
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the whole
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 in 1971 which was replaced with Cars by roughly the same portion of 43 per cent in 2001.Computers with 2% and Books
by
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with
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 1% of shares were the less common requirements between
english
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 people in 1971 and 2001, respectively. Back to the details shows that the amount of Petrol and Furniture remained approximately constant,
while
 the Computer
intrest
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interest
 increased
about
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 10%
while
 the
Restourants
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restaurants
were
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doubled. Cars percentages was
the
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half of 2001's value in 1991,as
oppose
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 to Food that experienced a significant fall from 44% in 1991 to 14% in 2001.
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