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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, anomake comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, anomake comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates
the
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how
much
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many
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 stores opened and closed during a seven-year period in an unnamed state.
Overall
, there is a downward trend
on
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the
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both figures.
However
, the
amount
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 of
shop's
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shop
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 closures outnumbered its openings.
To begin
 with, there were more than 8500 newly established
store
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stores
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 in 2011. The figure
then
 plunged to
the
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more than
a
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half of its previous number in 2012. Before witnessing a stable decrease
over
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 2014, it increase steadily
tried at
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 around 6000 new stores from 2013 to 2014.
In
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 the end of
given
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 period, 2018, there were only 3000 additions to the number of
the
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new
store
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stores
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 in that country.
Conversely
, the case of
shop's
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 closure which was less in
the
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2011, fluctuated before experiencing a
radican
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radical
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 downward in 2015 from above 6000 at the beginning to below 1000. Afterwards, the
amount
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 of stores closed rose dramatically and reached its peak at approximately 5000 a year after the
fell
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. The were 5000 shops closed
in
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 the end of the given period after
faced
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 a stable state between 2016 and 2017.
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