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Nowadays it is not only large company that can be able to make films. Digital technology enables anyone to produce films. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Introduction
In
today
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today's
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 era only big
company
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companies
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 make
films
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 because they
enough
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 budget to produce a
film
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 but recently digital technology
are
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allows everyone to make
films
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 freely.They have many merits and demerits in
forthcoming
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i
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 explain
there
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 positive merits.
Body paragraph 1
In today
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genration
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generation
try
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tries
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 to make
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film
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films
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 with
low
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a low
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buget
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budget
it
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which
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 allow people to do new creative things or helps them for
there
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their
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furture
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future
career
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careers
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.
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example
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 if
student
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a student
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try
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tries
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 to make his own project like
to make
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making
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fimls
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films
 on any kind of topic
then
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 make
films
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 or
produced
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produce
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 freely minded and
score
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scores
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 on his college projects.
Body paragraph 2
It
also
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 helps people to make money through
film
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.
For instance
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now a days
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nowadays,
 people
using
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use
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 mobile
phone
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phones
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 and through
this
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 they can make or produce
films
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 on motivational
topic
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topics
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 and
uploaded
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on
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them on
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youtube
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YouTube
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then
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youtube
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YouTube
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 gives rewards as money.
On the other
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hand
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hand,
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 Digital technology
also
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play
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plays
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 a big role on job oriented purposes
employee
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Employees
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 can impress
his
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their
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 boss
to make
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by making
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film
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a film
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 on
his
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their
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 product marketing.
For
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example
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example,
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 small
company
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companies
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 can
sale
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there
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their
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product
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products
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 through small
film
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 clips.
Conclusion
To sum
with
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apply
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In
today
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today's
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 world digital technology
play
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plays
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 a big role on day to day work whether
its
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it's
it is
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 in college life or in career life.

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Structure
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Task Response
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Grammar
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Vocabulary
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Examples
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Democratization of film production
  • Creative expression
  • Innovative content
  • Underrepresented communities
  • Culturally rich stories
  • Barriers to entry
  • Entrepreneurs
  • Market saturation
  • Oversaturation
  • Dilution of quality
  • Economic impact
  • Local film industries
  • Audience attention
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