In many professional sports, there is an increase in the number of athletes using banned substances to improve their performance. what are the causes and solutions of this.

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undeniable that in many professional games, usage of prohibited substances is becoming very common. It is used by
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competition and lax testing
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causing
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trend, and the most suitable solutions are imposing heavier punishment on offenders and make strong testing
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can curb
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problem. The main cause of
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in any support. Mostly,
players
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like
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they can take advantage
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their opponents and win the game without
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. Another reason
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is government testing systems which are not efficient
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they can prove positive to offenders. Many sports
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taking advantage of that, easily get themselves out
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testing
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prohibited doses before
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.
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, it is so common in wrestling matches
players
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a game
also
it does not catch in testing as well. A viable solution is to impose heavy punishment on sports
players
who are involved in
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and try to win a match by cheating on others. It helps to create a fear in their heart
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are ready to make violation
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 taking banned substance and might be they
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reluctant to take
this
action
further
in life. Government should need to
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testing
system
that cannot be bribed by people who try to offend it.
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trust of honest
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in
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, and
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or
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would be
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. In conclusion, strong competition and weaker testing
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are the main causes of
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issue it can be controlled
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imposing tough punishment provisions and
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stronger and trustable testing
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